Thursday, September 23, 2010
In Plato's "Allegory Of The Cave", Socrates implies that most people are unaware of greater truths outside of their comfort zone. He uses the PRISON-HOUSE to create a visual example of people who live in IGNORANCE. His story shows that people are creatures of habit, they do not want to accept that there is more to life than what you're used to. Change is FRIGHTENING and Socrates was exiled for thinking outside of the box. If someone refuses to accept the truth and would rather live in their own secluded fantasy, than they are a living example that "Ignorance is bliss".
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Hi Stefan,
ReplyDeleteI am going to give you my feedback since Harold has not been to class lately. I will go over your sentences and tell you which ones are good for the summary and which need work. My remarks will be in all CAPS.
In Plato's "Allegory Of The Cave", Socrates implies that most people are unaware of greater truths outside of their comfort zone. (THIS IS FINE FOR AN INTRODUCTORY SENTENCE). He uses the PRISON-HOUSE to create a visual example of people who live in IGNORANCE (BUT WHAT IS THAT VISUAL EXAMPLE? WITHOUT SPECIFICS THIS IS MORE INTERPRETATION THAN SUMMARY). His story shows that people are creatures of habit, they do not want to accept that there is more to life than what you're used to (AGAIN, USE AN EXAMPLE FOR THAT). Change is FRIGHTENING and Socrates was exiled for thinking outside of the box (THE SOCRATES EXILE IS NOT PART OF THE TEXT). If someone refuses to accept the truth and would rather live in their own secluded fantasy, than they are a living example that "Ignorance is bliss". (AGAIN, NO REFERENCES TO THE TEXT)
Stefan,
I see this as the work of a good thinker, but also as something that missed the particular assignment's requirements. If you were answering a question like "what did you get out of it?" that would be a very good answer. But for a summary your instructor gave you a particular list of directions you should stick to:
1. Is the main idea (thesis) of the passage clearly and correctly stated? YES
2. Are the important supporting ideas stated correctly and fully? NOT FULLY
3. Are all (or nearly all) unimportant ideas excluded? YES
4. Is the summary in the writer’s own words? YES
5. Is the summary written with few grammar/spelling/style errors? YES, BUT IT IT ALSO SHORT
6. Does the summary retain the sense and organization of the original passage? YES
7. Is personal opinion included in the summary? YES, TO THE EXCLUSION OF SOME IMPORTANT ELEMENTS OF THE TEXT
Good luck as you are reworking this. I enjoyed reading your passage as there were hardly any errors and you were able to see the argument Socrates makes, but make sure you provide enough evidence in your summary so that your readers can see the argument as well.
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